Holy fuck, this is a trip so far! Equal parts heartbreaking and terrifying. You have me screaming at and pounding my monitor as if it's a window I can somehow communicate screeched NOs through. Definitely excited to see where you take this.
I really fell in love with the three kids as characters, as people. Getting to see Meadow's, then Larkin's perspective on the nail-painting hangout time layered melancholy on melancholy... I fear for a third visit.
I think you did such an incredible job of like communicating the horror of knowing something bad did happen or is going to happen and feeling/being powerless to stop it, and then giving the reader that same feeling. I am going to be holding that feeling for a hot minute. Excellent work, and thank you for sharing it!!!
you've probably already seen my feelings about "mother, you + i" so to say i'm honored by the fact that you played and enjoyed what is here so far would be an understatement. thank you for sharing your thoughts both here and in the jam server.
i felt a strong tether reading your entry after writing mine for a lot of reasons, but especially in the way both of us approached mothers and intoxication scenes from different tones but not entirely dissimilar contexts.
as far as the horror, announcing itself like a train horn in the distance: it would also not be untrue to say that dread is the emotion i am most familiar with, and there is both more and less dread forthcoming.
The character writing is impeccable, and you set the scenes so vividly. All the pieces are set up to mesh together so perfectly; Larkin's family dynamic especially sticks out to me as especially deliciously well-written. I love the conflict between Larkin's upbringing as a killer and her desire to stray from that upbringing, and the conflict the things unpoken between her and Brooke brings up in their relationship.
I would love to have more ambient sounds; children playing on a schoolyard, the crackle of a campfire, birdsong.
The backgrounds you used are perfect, I'm impressed with how vivid this story felt.
i'm so glad to read that the pieces are clicking, that they're not as disparate as they seemed to me when i wrote them.
i'm not a visual artist in the least so the backgrounds were a fun experiment for me. when i finish the game i plan on doing a postmortem about the color language in them though.
definitely planning to add more sounds/bgm on the final pass, renpy's sound system eluded me more than anything but i'm putting in the work.
thank you for the truly lovely sketches, the sonic meme moon made me laugh.
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Holy fuck, this is a trip so far! Equal parts heartbreaking and terrifying. You have me screaming at and pounding my monitor as if it's a window I can somehow communicate screeched NOs through. Definitely excited to see where you take this.
I really fell in love with the three kids as characters, as people. Getting to see Meadow's, then Larkin's perspective on the nail-painting hangout time layered melancholy on melancholy... I fear for a third visit.
I think you did such an incredible job of like communicating the horror of knowing something bad did happen or is going to happen and feeling/being powerless to stop it, and then giving the reader that same feeling. I am going to be holding that feeling for a hot minute. Excellent work, and thank you for sharing it!!!
you've probably already seen my feelings about "mother, you + i" so to say i'm honored by the fact that you played and enjoyed what is here so far would be an understatement. thank you for sharing your thoughts both here and in the jam server.
i felt a strong tether reading your entry after writing mine for a lot of reasons, but especially in the way both of us approached mothers and intoxication scenes from different tones but not entirely dissimilar contexts.
as far as the horror, announcing itself like a train horn in the distance: it would also not be untrue to say that dread is the emotion i am most familiar with, and there is both more and less dread forthcoming.
Wowie! This was a truly engrossing read.
The character writing is impeccable, and you set the scenes so vividly. All the pieces are set up to mesh together so perfectly; Larkin's family dynamic especially sticks out to me as especially deliciously well-written. I love the conflict between Larkin's upbringing as a killer and her desire to stray from that upbringing, and the conflict the things unpoken between her and Brooke brings up in their relationship.
I would love to have more ambient sounds; children playing on a schoolyard, the crackle of a campfire, birdsong.
The backgrounds you used are perfect, I'm impressed with how vivid this story felt.
I'm itching to read the final act!
i'm so glad to read that the pieces are clicking, that they're not as disparate as they seemed to me when i wrote them.
i'm not a visual artist in the least so the backgrounds were a fun experiment for me. when i finish the game i plan on doing a postmortem about the color language in them though.
definitely planning to add more sounds/bgm on the final pass, renpy's sound system eluded me more than anything but i'm putting in the work.
thank you for the truly lovely sketches, the sonic meme moon made me laugh.